Trigger Warning: The song is political. It's not my intention to start a political argument on this forum, nor will I engage in one.
I've been writing songs for 52 years, and I think this one is my best. Best lyrics, best melody, best production. Unfortunately my 70-year-old voice has seen better days, and my engineering skills need some improvement, but the emotional quality still comes across.
The song was heavily inspired and influenced by Synfire. I'll elaborate if there's sufficient interest.
Comments
Sat, 2023-11-04 - 14:59 Permalink
Excellent songwriting, thanks for sharing! Your experience really shows. I like the subtle harmony, because it mostly emerges from background melodies. Your voice maybe rusty but that has something to it.
Not that it's really similar, but "This is not America" from Bowie came to mind when I listened to it the second time.
Production-wise it could have more punch and depth. And breathing room (reverb) on your voice. And a second voice. Just my subjective thoughts.
In this stage it's a (very good) demo tape. It's always a challenge to mix one's own songs. Someone else with absolutely no memory of all the things you considered while making this is more easily able to identify the elements that really matter. They might even hear something you never imagined.
Sat, 2023-11-18 - 03:08 Permalink
@Andre:
I've been meaning to respond, but I had a really bad case of Covid, and am just now getting back on my feet.
IMO all of your comments were spot on. Thank you.
I tried to use an AI voice (Synthesizer V Studio Pro - Natalie) to provide harmonies in the chorus, but I've yet to be happy with the results.
Interestingly, I had a melody in mind for the verses, but then decided to try using the melody factory. The very first result sent me off in a totally different direction, and I soon forgot about my original melody. The melody suggested by KIM was far from the eventually finished melody, but it was enough to get me started.
Sat, 2023-11-18 - 08:38 Permalink
Generated melodies almost never survive for long. But as you said, they send you in a direction and that reduces the infinity of possibilities to something concrete you can handle.
Get well soon!
And when your voice is back online again, sing the second voice yourself in a different register and timbre. I did that a lot and it worked fine.